UCHILE students post correction

Valeria's post correction

My favourite piece of technologic (wnf.)
My favourite instrument of technology is the notebook. because (n.n) i (c.) see the notebook (replace it writing “it”) like (ww.) an amazing tool. Whit (sp.) this you can do anything (ww.) as a computer but whit (sp.) the advantage that you can go to any place and still can (nn.) used (wvf.) it . The true is that I don't have my own notebook, but many times I have used one of this (ww. And wo.). Generally I use this tool for do (wvf.) things that (nn.) refeer (wvf.)to the university, because (sm.) is better when you need won more time (we.) and do this comfortably in a different place of your home (wo.). In my case (p.) as I don't have this (p.) for that reason (nn.) I can't use it very often but, in the future, when I have a notebook surely I will every day working in him ( wo. And w prep.). I believe that if this technology (wnf.) piece didn't exist (p.) the (nn.) communications processes (sm.) long more time (we.) and that (sm.) affect in a slow of the productivity (waf. And wo.) (first, write what is being affected and then the way.)

Billy buried Kes

A careless and absent mother and a nasty and grumpy brother were nothing but enough reasons for this boy to feel let dowm day by day. Since the moment he started training Kes, he felt that was what had brought him to life. He enjoyed it; he did it passionately, and was always interested in learning more and more about him. He had found a real motivation in life which meant that a living creature belonged to him, and it was to care about, and to devote time to. The day he found it dead, Billy felt devastated, and then he buried it with dignity. Undoubtedly, it was one of the saddest episodes that this boy had had to face ever.

Nevertheless, as time went by, Billy grew up knowing that he was really good at something, this is why he started behaving as a responsible sudent, not as a problematic one anymore. He didn’t need the support of his family to make progress; he had his teacher, who believed in him and in his capacities. However, there was something missing in his life, something that he meant to live for.

One day, his teacher got very good news for him. In a small town near there, there was an old man who, as well as Billy, had learned how to train hawks since very little, he had done it all his life, and he had also taugh his son. They both lived in a farm surrounded by hawks, and there were 20 of them! The man was very old and sick, that is why they needed someone who helped his son. As soon as Billy got there, he was proved, both men decided that he was the perfect one to fulfil the task. Finally, Billy stayed living in the farm, he studdied and trained the hawks, which was his most loved hobbie ever, and on top that, he found a person who loved him and cared about him as a father cares about his son, and as him cared about Kes.

As part of our experience

The work we have been doing with UCHILE students has been very interesting for me because it is what best gets close to what we have been doing at school in terms of correction.

Since UCHILE students have more or less the same English level from the children in the school I’m working in, it has been useful for me to realize what the mistakes that students in a pre intermediate (I’d dare to say) often make. Generally, they have lots of ideas, and they just write them down and do not care much about their grammar, either the accuracy in the words they use. The only main difference is that students do not do much writing at school, so that it becomes very challenging to write a text for them, however they are very willing to face English, and try to do their best.

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A BLOG RATER? ...take a look at this one.
As many of all (this) these ways of on line communication, blogs (are) were created to express yourself, tell about your interests, what are you spending your time in, show points of view…WHATEVER! (And then, get) in order get to know you more. That’s why; I think these should represent how the person really is in terms of (his/her) (x) way of writing, the colours he/she uses, the features chosen, etc. By this, I could tell that the blog: “I’m so weird…but I’m happy” by Javiera, is not the way she is, or at least, (like) the way I see her almost daily. But it has lots of good things to look at, beginning by Javy`s profile.

I think the design ought to be changed, as well as the colours in order to look more (brightly) brighter and attractive. However, the posts are all very good and very interesting, and almost all of them have a picture to illustrate what she is talking about, which is very good and catching for people who visit it.
As I said before, one of the posts’ purposes is showing author’s points of view. In this case, this blog has been very helpful because I’ve had the chance to know what Javiera thinks about different issues, which is always positive in order to have an approach to the person.

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Monday, 8 September 2008
Eat, drunk (wvf) and dance
In (w prep.) the 18 of September the (x) people of (w prep.)Chile normally celebrate (some thing about x) the independence or something like that. No (wf) really “el 18” is a moment of the year very special (wo), you can eat meat and drink alcohol, all as you can (w expression), with your family and your friends. This is not for homeland, not for the government, not for Bernardo O’Higgins, it’s just an excuse for eat (wvf) and drink (wvf) for (ww) two or three days. And its (ww) fun (p) very fun.

When I was a child, I played marble usually (wo), but I never learn (sm) to fly a kite, all my friends in my neighbourhood they (x) could fly a kite except (sm) me. I fell like Charlie Brown.

Nowadays, I always have a barbecue with my family, later I go to a party in the night (wo) or a disco. By the other hand (w expression) a friend of mine is celebrating his birthday in (x) the 16 of September, and it’s in this date when all start
(sm).

My favourite “18”?? I don’t have anyone (ww); because (sm) all are so good (by now), well in conclusion (sm) 18 (sm) it’s a great date, only comparable with Christmas and the (x) New Year.

Ok this is all, folks get (ww) fun.